假定你是李華，暑假想去一家外貿公司兼職，已寫好申請書和個人簡歷（resume）。給外教MsJenkins寫...

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   假定你是李華，暑假想去一家外貿公司兼職，已寫好申請書和個人簡歷（resume）。給外教Ms Jenkins 寫信，請她幫你修改所附材料的文字和格式（format）。

注意：

     1. 詞數100左右;

     2. 可以適當增加細節，已使行文連貫。

【回答】

Dear Ms Jenkins,

I am Li Hua. I am writing to tell you something about my plan for the coming summer vacation and I also want you to do me a favor.

In order to get some practical experience, I am planning to take a part-time job in a foreign capital company. I have already finished my job application and personal resume. But this is the first time that I have written an application and the personal resume, so I don’t even know if there are something to pay attention to. So, I’m writing you the letter , hoping you can give me some help. I will be very grateful if you can help me.

Looking forward to your reply.  And I’d be really thankful.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

【亮點】 本文是一篇較為優秀的範文。格式正確，要點全面，語言通順流暢，很好地完成了寫作任務。在本文中開頭提出寫信的目的，然後具體講述自己的困難，再提出請求，最後表達自己的感激之情。所以在內容上邏輯*較強。此外，作者還使用了不定式短語In order to get some practical experience, 現在分詞短語hoping you can give me some help, 賓語從句if there are something to pay attention to等。經典句式this is the first time that I have written an application and the personal resume也是文章的亮點所在。

知識點：提綱作文

題型：書面表達